Our whiskey priest is on his
was to freedom. He is but a few days’ journey from the capitol where he will be
safe. But yet again, we run into none other than the mestizo. The last two
times our priest has conversed with him, nothing bad has happened. Hopefully
this time will be the same. Nope, not quite. The whiskey priest has walked into
a trap. The lieutenant and a group of soldiers are waiting for him. There seems
to be no hope of escape. Will the priest make it out alive? The lieutenant is
in a hurry to get back to the prison with the priest. The journey takes two
days which is a lot less time than it took the priest to get from the prison to
the location of capture. In prison, the priest is given his own private cell
and some brandy to reflect upon his life as he waits for tomorrow.
The sun rises as the time
draws near. The priest has been convicted of treason and is to be killed later
today. Time has slowed but not enough. If only our priest could find a way not
to die. Unfortunately reader, it is inevitable, the whiskey priest has been
shot and killed. There are no more priests left besides Padre Jose who lives
quite unhappily with his wife.
The end has come to the
journey of the whiskey priest. And so, dear reader, I am inclined to say that
this is my last entry on The Power and
the Glory. We may meet again, dear reader, but for now, I say good bye.
This is a really good ending corri! I like how you make the reader feel sad in the end for the death of the whiskey priest by the way you wrote it. Good job with following the reporter guidelines. You do sound like a professional!! Good job!
ReplyDeleteAnother thing, do you think he died as a sort of hero to others in the end, or did he remain a coward forever??
ReplyDeleteNice work, Corri! I liked how you took the scene step by step, explaining what was happening to the reader. The only thing I would add would be to make this seem more like a journal entry, less like a summery. Other than that, good job!
ReplyDeleteA lovely job on the post. It could just be me, but the post felt a little short. There was at least one spelling mistake, but it's understandable since spell check doesn't always catch typos. Your ending was very interesting, like something that would be used in a magazine article.
ReplyDeleteGreat job Corri! I think your ending was really moving and emotional even. It really was a great ending to the blogs and to the novel! There were several spelling errors and colloquialisms, but other than that, it was really well thought out! Excellent work! :)
ReplyDeleteSo this is the first time I've been on your blog and I really like how you write like you're in the middle of observing the things happening around you. The line about time slowing down but not enough was a sad but true fact; reality struck that the last priest was no longer alive, and there was no others in Mexico. Maybe, in a sense, when the priest was shot, the Mexican citizens thought their hope had been killed, too.
ReplyDeleteGood ending to your blog! It might have been effective to add how the mestizo tricked the priest - showing how, once again, he cannot neglect his priestly duties.
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